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Sleepwalking above by KarinaMacGill

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Here's my Christmas critique because I can't stop looking at this watercolor.

What I like:

The subject matter: Not many people talk about sleepwalking these days, least of all supernatural beings sleepwalking. You get full marks for originality and creativity, for I'd never imagine an angel suffering from somnambulism.

The birds- they're solid, rendered figures with accurate gesture, and established in the foreground. Their presence also reminds us of the angel's otherworldly appearance.


What to think about:

The background clouds- I'm nitpicking here, but this is one case where lighter washes do not help background clarity. The angel is standing on something rather than floating because his wings are stiff in contrast to the dynamic birds. If he's flying, then show the wings in motion rather than standing still, and if he's standing then create a form of ground for him to stand on.

Also, think about lighting; the angel's shadows are different from those of the clouds, so he seems to be pasted in front of a background. Make sure that the shading is consistent, and you should be good to go.

Happy Christmas. Paint more watercolors from above!
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KarinaMacGill Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Thank you very much for the very first DA critique I ever got! :aww:

What I most appreciate in your style, is that you don't say "this and that is good, but this and that is bad, wrong, a mistake" as teachers often do (even I do that sometimes when I give advice to younger or less experienced artists) but you say "what I LIKE" and "to think about".

This is much easier to accept, and to respond to. Maybe the hardest thing about being an artist is to learn to hear and learn from critique.

Also I see the things that you pointed out, and I was thinking about how could I improve them, and I got a lot of enthusiasm to start painting again! I find your words inspireing.

Im allready working on a piece, I have the line art, I'll start painting this afternoon!

I wish you a happy new year, and thank you again!
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JayaLaw Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I also wish you a happy New Year, and it was a pleasure to help! Can't wait to see what the words have inspired on your canvas.
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KarinaMacGill Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Thank you! I'm a bit busy with school stuff right now, I'll upload those first, then hopefully I will be able to paint again!
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JayaLaw Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Yay! Be sure to link them to me when they're done. And totally agree about the school stuff.
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KarinaMacGill Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
I messed up with the one I was working on, I need to figure out how to fix it... I don't know if I can, since it's a water colour.

But, here's something I done today: [link] , inspired by the colour sceme of one of my favourite story books from my childhood.
I'd like to make a series of valentines cards like this, do you have any oppinion on the style or technique? How can I improve the next one?

It'd mean a lot to me if you'd say a few words about it. :aww:
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JayaLaw Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
For creating a series of Valentine cards, you may want to go for a series of more Valentine-themed images with a brighter palette. I understand that you chose the color scheme for its emotional connection, but a bit of market research and studying competing cards may lend insight into the tones that viewers want.

By the way, think you could peruse my gallery and tell me what you think of some of the artwork? Here's one of my watercolor comics: [link]
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KarinaMacGill Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks! I made a second one, this is more valentine-ish colours. :D [link]

I checked out your comic, it'S very likeable, the artwork needs improvement, but otherwise I think it can become popular! Try uploading it also to drunkduck, there comicstrips get bigger attention!
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JayaLaw Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Much better! The hands making the heart shape are just perfect.

Currently I update A La Mode on the Smackjeeves hosting website, but I'm willing to switch to DrunkDuck if it means more readers. Just going to be quite a transition.
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